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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweight the disadvantages?

#museums #charge #admission #people #outweight
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Museums
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 are a reliable source for many things
such
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 as the society's culture,
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history, and
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art.
People
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 can enhance their knowledge by visiting different
museums
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 either in their country or in foreign countries.n
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, one of the recently debated social topics is whether
museums
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 should be in charge or be free for the public.
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 charging
people
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 may have lots of drawbacks, I think it can be more beneficial for
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 to sell tickets
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 of being free.
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 with, the museum can reveal significant information in many different areas,
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 as history, technology,
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science
 and culture. Every individual, especially students, should visit their local
museums
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 in order to get noticed about their cultures. If
museums
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 were free, visitors from any economical level could visit them.
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, the fee for
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 may discourage poor
people
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,
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 visiting
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 may not be
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their priority. On the other side, the museum admission fees are not
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 expensive.
Museums
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 should pay a lot for
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maintenance
, refurbishment, and cleaning. All these activities are costly and their budget may not meet the end. The more money they have, the more services they can offer to the public. All in all,
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 tickets for
museums
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 are inexpensive, they can be helpful for the museum's fixture cost. To summarise,
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 should support
people
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 and students to visit
museums
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, because it can improve their social knowledge, but the idea of free
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 would not be good enough and
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 its' disadvantages are more than its' advantages.
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