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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles would be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Currently, new technologies are developing
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 an unstoppable speed, making our life more comfortable.
Furthermore
, there is likely to be a futuristic world provided with non-driven automobiles. For
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, I will support the advantages point of view and a series of advantages and disadvantages will be exposed.
Firstly
, automatic driving cars are less harmful than
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traditional
car
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. Due to
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 possibility of
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communicates
 each car with another
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 is possible to coordinate them, reducing ceasing accidents or accidents related to human failures. One clear example is the different experiments and tests made in Tesla's facilities, making a group of lorries drive without
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 a track, resulting in a perfect performance without incidents.
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, the main problem that specifically backfires
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 innovation, unexpectedly, is the human-been m.
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human behaviour. The wide majority of incidents related to driverless machines are related to s human-failures or a key point generated by a human. To illustrate, and following the same companies tests, Tesla tested their
first
 automatic car in a daily routine track for 24 hours, being the unic problem that occurred during
this
 rest was carried by a pedestrian that went across the road illegally and ant night, been
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impossible
 to see him even for a human.
Consequently
,
this
 accident delayed the autonomous driving idea for a year and stained its image. In conclusion, automatic cars are the future, making travelling
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safety
 and less dangerous than the actual trend.
On the other hand
, is important to measure its testing experiments, reducing the actual problems generated by the environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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