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In the modern world, many employees lack soft skills such as communication and working in teams. What are the main causes of this problem? What are the effects of the lack of such skills?

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It is widely known that most staffs are in need of soft
skills
such
 as
communication
skills
 and working with
teams
 that are required in
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a job
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job
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 in
contemporary
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 world. In the following paragraph, I will discuss the main causes for
this
 and the possible effects of
this
 problem. There are several causes why
this
 has been
increasingly
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 serious problem which leads to consequences in
jobs
. Unbalanced education is the most significant source of
this
 problem.
This
 is because most students in school focus mainly on studying academic knowledge so
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they have less interest
on
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 extracurricular activities which leads them not to have
communication
skills
 and
skills
 in working with
teams
. Another cause behind
this
 is that parents are
also
 involved in causing the absence of
such
skills
 in some
people
 nowadays. One reason for
this
 is that most parents are busy for children to provide on
commuting
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 environment with others which results in the absence of soft
skills
such
 as
communication
skills
 in
jobs
.
Finally
,
people
 would not have
communication
skills
 by working from home due to Covid- restrictions nowadays. It is almost certain that there are a variety of effects coming from the absence of
skills
such
 as
communication
 and working in
teams
. Perhaps as significant as
this
 is that
people
 who
lack
 social
skills
,
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 have confusion which impacts disadvantages in
jobs
.
Additionally
, many
labors
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 who
lack
skills
 including
communication
, fail to commute with other workers
especially
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 in
jobs
. The reason for
this
 is that
people
 who did not have
such
skills
,
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 have been in isolation in childhood. It is
also
 suggested that
employee
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employees
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 who
lack
skills
 in working with
teams
,
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 are unsuccessful to collaborate with other co-workers effectively.
As a result
, they will adjust with lots of difficulties which leads them to job dissatisfaction. Taking everything into account, it is possible that these causes in childhood
brings
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 about the
lack
 of
skills
such
 as
communication
 and working in
teams
 which results in facing troubles and separation from
other co-worker
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another co-worker
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 in
jobs
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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