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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
These days
people
 are keen to discover their surroundings including their family trees, their villages or the exact
place
 they live in
such
 as the building itself or the
house
. I believe
,
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this
 comes from human’s explorer nature while
richness
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 of information sources
make
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 it too comfortable to reach the answers quickly. Passion for finding something new is rewarding and exciting for
people
, so we have always found out something during history- a new continent, strange fish kind, new chemical formulas or gravity and so on. If a person grows up in a
house
,
this
place
 becomes a shelter, a sweet memory, somewhere with familiar faces. It triggers the kids to make experiments on the strange places of the
house
 and
this
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 experiments turn to passion to search
about
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 some facts
such
 as who lived in
this
place
 before, which architect has built
this
 area,
which
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 historical states
this
 region had belonged to etc. Archives, libraries,
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collection
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 of old newspapers, and especially
internet
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 today link us easily to information about the past of the places we live in. One can google just the name of the district and
wikipedia
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 will suggest how old
this
place
 is, which popular historical
people
 have lived there etc. Or
people
 ask their elderly ones how they acquired their properties- so many channels help us to learn about the past. When I was a kid, I used to question my dad and grandfather that what they did during their young years and that way I learned that the
first
 and most lovely
place
 I lived in and grew up was a reward to my grandparent for working hard on the factory. I remember
this
 made me
to
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have a look at old family photos to see the past designs of our
house
. To sum up,
past
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the past
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 has always been an interesting topic for
people
 to think about. Maybe more information
on
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 the surroundings make us more confident
on
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 the future. Exploration love and many resources to learn about history lead us to dig more about the past.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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