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The only way to improve the safety on our roads is to have stricter punishment for driving offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#safety #roads #punishment #offenders
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It is believed that sterner
punishment
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 for violators of
traffic
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 rules is the only way to decrease
accidents
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 on
roads
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. While I believe that
traffic
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 violators should be punished strictly, I disagree that stricter
punishment
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 for those violating the law is the only solution for ensuring
road
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 safety. Admittedly, reckless driving, speeding and breach of
traffic
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 rules by careless
drivers
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 can
cause
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accidents
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.
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,
a
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more stringent
punishment
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 for
drivers
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 would be an effective measure to make
roads
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 safer. It would deter people from violating
traffic
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 rules
such
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 as jumping the red light and over-speeding.
This
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 would be a step towards
road
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 safety.
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, there are many other factors
which
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that
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cause
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road
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accidents
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, and it is equally essential to deal with them to improve
road
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 safety.
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 with, poor
road
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 condition is considered a major reason for
road
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 casualties.
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, narrow
roads
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 and sharp curves often force even
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law-abiding
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law- abiding
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drivers
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 to make mistakes.
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,
drivers
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 alone cannot be blamed for
such
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 mishaps and giving them stricter punishments in these cases is no solution
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, poor climate conditions can be a major
cause
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 of
accidents
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.
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, poor visibility due to dense mist and rain,
slippery
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and slippery
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roads
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 on account of snowfall make driving difficult and
cause
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 serious
accidents
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 in many countries. Stricter
punishment
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 for
drivers
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 is a futile exercise in handling
such
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 problems. Modern technological innovations should be used to deal with
such
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 emergency situations. In summary, while punishing
drivers
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 with heavier penalties would reduce
accidents
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, there are certain situations where
drivers
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 are not responsible for
accidents
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, and so other effective measures should
also
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 be taken.
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