Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many argue that
music
brings
people
of different
generations
and ages close to each other. I completely disagree with that because
i
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think that
people
of different
cultures
and
generations
value different things. Different
generations
prefer different
music
.
For instance
,
music
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the music
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of
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the 1990's
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1990's
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1990s
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was truly based on love and patriotism. Modern youth
on
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the other hand,may find it old fashioned and vintage. Youth prioritise sweet and heartbreaking songs as breakups are common now.
Furthermore
,our youth gets
adrenaline
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rush by listening to pop and
hiphop
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hip-hop
hip hop
music
.
on the other hand
,old
people
might consider it noise and useless sound.
Consequently
,these
generations
can never be bonded through
music
.
In addition
,different
cultures
value different things. Some lyrics which are famous among  teenagers now can be considered explicit or vulgar
for
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traditional
people
.
That is
the reason why
people
of
different
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a different
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culture
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cultures
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can never have similar
music
interests.
For instance
,a verse from a song by imagine dragons stated as "love me like am
food
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a food
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and you are hunger" traditional
people
would find
this
odd and disrespectful.
on the other hand
,western
people
would claim that it is
best
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the best
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way to express your love to your lover.
This
contrast of opinion makes it difficult for two
cultures
to have
same
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the same
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taste in
music
.
Consequently
,
this
will not bring them close to each other. In conclusion,
i
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do not believe that
music
can bring different
generations
and
cultures
close because each era has its  preferences and each culture has its own values.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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