Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because university education only benefits students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a discussion about whether the cost of studying at
college
and university should be fully borne by students. From my personal perspective, tertiary
education
benefits both individuals and
society
as a whole, so I do not feel that its tuition fees should be paid by those receiving the
education
alone. There are two dimensions where we can easily observe the positive impacts that
college
students bring to
society
, with the
first
one being economics. While
college
graduates, as shown in many surveys, are highly likely to enjoy a better wage than school leavers,
such
an increase in their salary will
then
translate into more taxes paid to the local government as well as more disposable income expended in daily life for either daily necessities or entertainment.
This
means that individuals with a
college
degree can certainly contribute to tax revenues and sales in retailing sectors of
society
.
In addition
to these economic benefits of
college
education
to
society
, an advanced collective capacity to adapt to changes
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the
second
dimension that I think
college
graduates can help with.
This
is because by learning how to learn in university, they have become continuous learners and
therefore
are more capable of readapting themselves to the everchanging world, where the social and technological development of any nation must depend on a pool of
such
talents.
That is
to say, without a large number of university graduates, our
society
would suffer a lot when facing social and economic challenges. With the two points made above, it is clear that human
being
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studying at
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institution
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do have significant benefits to
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as a whole, so the proposal that
education
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in
this
field should only be paid by individuals is unreasonable. I believe government funding should be part of the cost, and
this
can be in the form of
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government-funded grants or special loan programs to support students financially, especially those from low socioeconomic backgrounds.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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