Due to development and expansion of supermarket many small local markets are unable to complete. Some people think that the closing of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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People

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have several views regarding whether or not shutting down

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local organizations

bring

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various benefits

for

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society. Even though, I agree that small and local companies are sufficient to cope

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and compete with large companies due to

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advent of

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world and expansion of

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supermarket

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supermarkets

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view

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about

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assertion.

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supermarket

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a supermarket

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in society confer

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of advantages concerning the time, as

large

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shopping complex confer the opportunity to

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to buy all necessities under of roof , which would be very convenient for them.

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, the option of purchasing

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product

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products

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out of

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variety of commodities is

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possible with

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the supermarket

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supermarket

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supermarkets

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. Not only

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people

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also

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get durable products with the presence of

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brand

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but not least, facilities which are conferred by

supermarket

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are very amazing which makes

purchase

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the purchase

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more comfortable . To cite an example, in shopping complex

people

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can even buy small

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grocery

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groceries

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, clothes and entertainment amenities under one building and we get one product with different brands like toothpaste .

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, in terms of comfortability and options supermarkets are advantageous.

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, local

shops

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also

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have their own importance in society.

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one stop

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shops

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provide cheaper products to residents. Being affordable, everyone can buy goods and

fulfill

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their needs , as well as, bargaining is possible in

local

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the local

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market , so personage can buy

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commodities

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according to their budget.

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, it

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source

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of revenue for local citizens by giving them employment in different

shops

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salesman

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, which is

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fruitful for boosting the economy. Research conducted by local authorities,

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which

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apply

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reveals that in India, 70

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people

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of people

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depend upon small

shops

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for their

livehood

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livelihood

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local

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the local

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market is

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important. To sum up,

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the merits of

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a supermarket

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supermarket

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supermarkets

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cannot be replaced by local

shops

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but

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apply

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we cannot ignore the positive side of

street

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the street

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market concerning

the

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apply

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economic development and affordability.

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