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Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. What is your opinion?

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Many people believe that
teachers
 should be paid at an hourly rate while some individuals consider that
teachers
 should be paid according to how much their
students
 learn. In
this
 essay, I agree that
teachers
 and instructors should be paid due to the
lessons
 their
students
 have learnt.
To begin
 with, teaching and learning a subject is not easy for
both
teachers
 and
students
.
Teachers
 always strive for the best and they
also
 want their
students
 to get flying colours marks. If a
student
 does not put his effort into his study,
teachers
 must be really tired and stressed since they are trying their best to teach a
student
. By paying salary hourly, some
teachers
 might not want to put effort into their
students
 since they automatically get an hourly rate.
For instance
, if
both
 teacher and
student
 do not put their concentration on the
lessons
, it would be very tiring for the parents who have to pay for the
teachers
 to get a quality education for their children.
On the other hand
, by paying according to the
lessons
 that the
students
 studied, children can be taught a quality education.
Teachers
 must put all their energy and time into their
students
 to get flying colours in their exams and tutorials.
In addition
,
both
teachers
 and
students
 pay attention to their studies and do their best for the exams. To conclude, it is undeniable that to get flying colours,
both
 teacher and
student
 have to put attention and effort In my opinion, paying according to the
lessons
 is effective for
both
students
 and
teachers
.
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