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Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. What is your opinion?

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Many people believe that
teachers
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 should be paid at an hourly rate while some individuals consider that
teachers
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 should be paid according to how much their
students
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 learn. In
this
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 essay, I agree that
teachers
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 and instructors should be paid due to the
lessons
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 their
students
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 have learnt.
To begin
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 with, teaching and learning a subject is not easy for
both
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teachers
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 and
students
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.
Teachers
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 always strive for the best and they
also
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 want their
students
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 to get flying colours marks. If a
student
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 does not put his effort into his study,
teachers
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 must be really tired and stressed since they are trying their best to teach a
student
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. By paying salary hourly, some
teachers
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 might not want to put effort into their
students
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 since they automatically get an hourly rate.
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, if
both
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 teacher and
student
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 do not put their concentration on the
lessons
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, it would be very tiring for the parents who have to pay for the
teachers
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 to get a quality education for their children.
On the other hand
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, by paying according to the
lessons
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 that the
students
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 studied, children can be taught a quality education.
Teachers
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 must put all their energy and time into their
students
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 to get flying colours in their exams and tutorials.
In addition
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,
both
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teachers
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 and
students
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 pay attention to their studies and do their best for the exams. To conclude, it is undeniable that to get flying colours,
both
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 teacher and
student
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 have to put attention and effort In my opinion, paying according to the
lessons
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 is effective for
both
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students
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 and
teachers
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.
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