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As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society？

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Nowadays, the increasing number of young
people
 who live independently or with
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 members of their family has been one of the major social issues among populations in many parts of the world.
This
 essay will start
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with
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 the causes of
this
 problem and end up with my opinion.
These
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There
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 are several reasons why
this
 is happening. Traditionally, we used to live with all members of
family
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the family
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 in a large house for years because it was considered
as
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a
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natural
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a natural
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 thing.
However
, the world has been developed rapidly over the short period and it leads young folks to think another way that it is an outdated view that
family
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families
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 have to unite by living together To be specific, common reasons exist why youngsters
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determine
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 to live away from their
family
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families
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.
First
, they just want to satisfy their desires.
For instance
, it might vital considerably for someone to have their private place so that they do not be disturbed by another even though it is a member of their family.
Otherwise
, some just want to reside in a completely new place thereby living with their own ability.
In addition
, it would be not overlooked a situation for their dreams. Some decide to go abroad or
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to different
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 regions to
acheive
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achieve
 their academic purposes
as
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such as
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 entering a higher education institution or finding job
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 in the
widen
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 world
,
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 because these might be unavailable for certain
people
 due to
their
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limitation
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limitations
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of
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in
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 the regions.
Although
 these situations made them separated from their families, whether they want or not, I do not think it
have
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 a negative effect.
This
 phenomenon would enhance young
people
's ability of independence and is a great deal to grow as true adults. In conclusion, it seems to me that
this
 problem can be a turning point for many
people
 rather than considered
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a serious problem.
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