Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, fixed
punishment
is one of the most discussed
subject
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. Some
people
think there are should be established penalization for every kind of
crime
. Other
people
believe that the decision for
punishment
is related to different situations and other elements,
also
punishment
would be changeable due to
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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and various
crime
type
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types
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. On the one hand, there are many kinds of
delinquent
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delinquents
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such
as intentional or unintentional and some
people
believe that
punishment
is changeable for them.
For example
, for murdering
as
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is
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an intentional
crime
, authorities should determine imprisonment forever. Because
that is
the highest level of
crime
and it would
hurts
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to
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people
in society.
However
, for
drug-related
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crime
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crimes
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,
the
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fine or three to five years
prison
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in prison
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is a suitable
punishment
.
Consequently
,
for
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deciding about penalizing should
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the elements
such
as mental health and it has
impact
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an impact
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on the
punishment
,
also
people
if
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who
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had
mental
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a mental
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illness, their
crime
would be unintentional and it changes
punishment
.
On the other hand
,
people
think it is fair to determine fixed penalization and it has more benefits. Fixed
punishment
leads to decreasing guilty numbers.
Example
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can be seen as financial
crime
, the law makes heavy fine punishments for
people
committed to these
crime
types. So, individuals prefer to avoid
from
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that.
In addition
,
people
are knowing that fixed punishments so it effects
in
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social stability and security,
it
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which
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means less
crime
rate all in all. In conclusion, it is reasonable to determine
punishment
with
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evaluation
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the
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situation or mental health and motivation of
guilty
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the guilty
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person. in my
view
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,view
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these fixed punishments are not feasible and it is advisable to determine based on individual
condition
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conditions
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.
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