In some countries, more and more adults choose to continue to live with their parents after they graduate and have found jobs. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays in some countries, most the grownups tend to live with their
parents
after finishing their studies and having a job.
This
essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of adults living with
parents
. the two main disadvantages of continuing live with
parents
:
always
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parents
try to control your steps and by
parents
'
income
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most the grownups do not attempt to achieve
high
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salary a job.
Firstly
, some
parents
see their
children
as little
children
even when they grow up.
this
way most dads and moms tend to control their
children
even graduated university.
For instance
, my dad usually asks me to know if I have eaten my dinner or wearing warm clothes at work.
Secondly
, when the coming source of income on both sides, by
parents
and adults
children
, job starters do not try to get high salary career due to no feeling lack of money.
However
, living with
parents
also
has some major advantages like taking care of their
children
and
motivated
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every day with motherly wise.
For example
in my hometown, south of Kazakhstan, most people not only try to live with their
parents
,
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but
also
moved away to another city to settle down with
family
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a family
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. what is more, feeling a mother's love gives people the best motivation in the world. To conclude, continuing live with
parents
have certain advantages than disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intergenerational
  • economic stability
  • cohabitation
  • living arrangements
  • financial autonomy
  • student loans
  • emotional stability
  • transitional phase
  • career development
  • self-reliance
  • independence
  • tension
  • values
  • lifestyles
  • personal space
  • autonomy
  • financial burden
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