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Some feel that cities shold be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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People
 have different views about how to invest
into
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cities
. Some
people
 argue that
governments
 should spend money on decorating
cities
 to become more beautiful.
However
, other
people
 think that it is important to focus on
develop
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cities
'
funtionality
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functionality
. In
this
 essay,
the
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both views of
this
 argument would be analyzed and
i
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 will give my own point of view. On the one hand, making beautiful
cities
 is really
neccessary
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necessary
 for
governments
 because of the following reasons.
First
, the
cities
 that are decorated beautifully can attract a lot of tourists.
Therefore
,
people
 can earn money from developing tourism. The
second
 reason is that
governments
 can raise awareness of protecting the beauty of
cities
 from
citizens
.
As a result
, they might feel proud of their
cities
 and can have some activities to protect their environment and their
cities
.
On the other hand
, if the
cities
 want to develop,they need to be invested
by
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 many fields, not only tourism.
Hence
, developing other functionality of
cities
 is
also
 very essential for the countries.
Therefore
,
governments
 should spend money on focusing on
fianance
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finance
 and transportation of
cities
 to make the lives of
citizens
 become better.
As a result
, if
citizens
 have convenient lives in the
cities
, they may tend to stay
at
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 the
cities
 for a long time and contribute to the development of
cities
. In conclusion, it seems to me that
governments
 should invest
to
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 both design and other functionality of
cities
 to help
cities
 develop in many fields.
As a result
,
citizens
 would
be
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love to stay and contribute to
cities
.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Cultural heritage
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban planning
  • Sustainable development
  • Psychological well-being
  • Economic growth
  • Tourism industry
  • Architectural marvels
  • Public spaces
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental impact
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial hubs
  • Green spaces
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