You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Many students
be
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labor
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while learning.
This
matter effect
for
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decrease
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time
for qualification of learn and fixed sense under pressure. Based on
this
problem, I have two arguments and resolutions for it.
This
issue
due
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to economic
condition
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conditions
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and human
ambition
for
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to
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get more experiences.
Firstly
,
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the root
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of the
matters
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is bad economic difficulties
for
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their
life
, especially
need
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food for
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,
place
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a place
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for
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, clothes for
weared
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and
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others
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other
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others
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.
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, if individuals have no work, so they can not ensure
continue
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their
life
.
Secondly
,
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of the matters is human
ambition
, specifically, there are citizens
want
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to get more experience
for
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alter their
life
from
current
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condition. So, economic pressure and human
ambition
establish some student work while studying. Following the complications, there are two solutions.
Firstly
,
student
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students
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have to
make
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take
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priority
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a priority
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. People
need
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create
priority
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a priority
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in their
life
.
However
, they need income or
experiences
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experience
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, but they must make
a
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it a
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priority
. Studying supports working? Or
working
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does working
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supports
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studying? If you choose
studying
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as the
first
priority
, so you will choose
flexible
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job without
disturb
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the
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study.
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, if you have
class
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a class
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in the morning, so you must search and choose
job
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a job
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in the evening or
night
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nighttime
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time
.
Secondly
, they can make management
time
. After you have
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priority
, you can create management
time
.
Creating
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the schedule based on
priority
and
stay
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staying
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discipline
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for doing all agenda
which
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that
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you have.
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, if you go to study in the morning, you must go to
work place
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workplace
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in the evening or
night
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at night
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, not go to
playing
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play
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with friends to others places. The conclusion, I should give two reasons, that are economic condition and human
ambition
to be big causes for
this
complicatios
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complication
complications
. So, consistency with the
priority
and best management
time
will make
you
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your
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success
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for
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and
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alter your
life
, without
make
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making
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you under pressure.
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