Today more and more toursts are visiting places where conditiond are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
It is true that nowadays human beings
more
visiting difficult Add a missing verb
are more
places
, such
as the Sahara Desert or Antarctic
. Even though Correct article usage
the Antarctic
this
trend can be beneficial because people
likely to hit the gold of their life, the main disadvantage is that people
could be face
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be facing
the
problem which can be overlooked.
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apply
On the other hand
, one of the most important reasons why this
is a positive development is that visiting problematic area
might Fix the agreement mistake
areas
be make
travellers successful since few Change the verb form
make
persons
think travelling Replace the word
people
on
hazardous Change preposition
in
places
is challenging. For example
, according to
the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, Change preposition
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it
revealed that 80% of Correct pronoun usage
apply
tourism
who have Replace the word
tourists
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the experience
experience
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experienced
to visit
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visiting
the
difficult locations tend to be satisfied that they can make a killing of their fear.
Having said that Correct article usage
apply
visit
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visiting
the
difficult Correct article usage
apply
places
plays a major role in someone’s fear which can be seen as an advantage.
Alternatively, this
development is thought to be disadvantageous is
visiting Correct your spelling
in
such
hard places
allow traveller
to face the hazard. Add an article
the traveller
a traveller
This
is because places
such
as high
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a high
mountain
, deep oceans, or dark Fix the agreement mistake
mountains
cave
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caves
height
or Fix the agreement mistake
heights
depth
. To illustrate Fix the agreement mistake
depths
this
, in recent news, It has been reported that most of
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apply
travellers
have been harmed by trying to travel Add an article
the travellers
into
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to
a risky
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a risky place
risky places
places
. As a result
, visiting areas where conditions are difficult it
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apply
people
can get harm
which can be considered a drawback.
All in all, Wrong verb form
harmed
although
this
trend is beneficial because people
likely
to hit the gold of their life by Add a missing verb
are likely
traveling
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travelling
difficult
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to difficult
places
, it can be detrimental as hard places
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the traveller
a traveller
traveller
to face the hazard that might be Fix the agreement mistake
travellers
life threatening
.Add a hyphen
life-threatening
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