Today more and more toursts are visiting places where conditiond are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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It is true that nowadays human beings
more
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visiting difficult
places
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,
such
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as the Sahara Desert or
Antarctic
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the Antarctic
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. Even though
this
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trend can be beneficial because
people
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likely to hit the gold of their life, the main disadvantage is that
people
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could
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the
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problem which can be overlooked.
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, one of the most important reasons why
this
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is a positive development is that visiting problematic
area
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might
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travellers successful since few
persons
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people
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think travelling
on
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in
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hazardous
places
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is challenging.
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,
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the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University,
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revealed that 80% of
tourism
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tourists
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who have
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the experience
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experience
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to visit
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the
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difficult locations tend to be satisfied that they can make a killing of their fear. Having said that
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visiting
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the
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difficult
places
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plays a major role in someone’s fear which can be seen as an advantage. Alternatively,
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development is thought to be disadvantageous
is
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in
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visiting
such
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hard
places
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allow
traveller
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the traveller
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to face the hazard.
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is because
places
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such
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as
high
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a high
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mountain
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mountains
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, deep oceans, or dark
cave
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caves
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there might be dangerous
height
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heights
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or
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depths
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. To illustrate
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, in recent news, It has been reported that most
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travellers
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the travellers
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have been harmed by trying to travel
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to
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a risky
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a risky place
risky places
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places
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.
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, visiting areas where conditions are difficult
it
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people
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can get
harm
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which can be considered a drawback. All in all,
although
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this
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trend is beneficial because
people
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likely
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to hit the gold of their life by
traveling
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travelling
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difficult
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to difficult
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places
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, it can be detrimental as hard
places
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allow
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the traveller
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traveller
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travellers
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to face the hazard that might be
life threatening
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life-threatening
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