The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts becoming difference in ownership of electrical devices amount of time to do chores in households in one country from 1920 to 2019. Generally speaking, the percentage of vacuum
as well as
allocatingCorrect article usage
the
cleaner
remains constant between 1920 and 2019.Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
Moreover
,in 1920 the ratio
of refrigerator
Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
reaches
the lowest point over the Wrong verb form
reached
period
.Furthermore
the number of hours of chores Add a comma
Furthermore,
in
per week gradually falls down during the Change preposition
apply
period
. When it comes to details, refrigerator percent
commences with a tiny portion after that it skyrockets to just over 50% between 1920 and 1940, Change the spelling
per cent
however
, beginning from 1980, the refrigerator ratio
is 100% and exactly the same until the end of the period
. Furthermore
, washing machine’s numbers starts
the Change the verb form
start
period
with 40% and then
it rises to 60% in 1940.In 60s
the washing machines percentage Change the article
the 60s
is
70% Wrong verb form
was
similarly
vacuum cleaner portion the
same as well.After 1960 the Add a missing verb
was the
ratio
of washing machines is fluctuating by 2019.Turning to vacuum cleaner
, it beginsFix the agreement mistake
cleaners
with
30% and Change preposition
at
continuing
a gradual climb until 2000 Wrong verb form
continues
then
the ratio
is 100 % unchanged from 2000 to 2019. It can be clearly seen that there is a gradual decrease in the number of housework hours in
per week by 1960, it commences with 50%to 20%.When we observed between 1980 and 2019, the Change preposition
apply
ratio
is slightly fluctuating at the end
of the period
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