In many countries traditional foods are being replaced by international fast food. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People have different options regarding snacks.It is argued that many nations prefer to eat international foods
instead
of local bread. This
essay will examine cases of negative consequences to the community and the public and the forthcoming paragraphs showed
the agreement and the disagreement sides.
On the one hand, the basic disadvantage is that these kinds of fast snacks lead the nation to obesity. To put it another way, nowadays humans live in a modern and Wrong verb form
show
technological advance
world, that's why fast meals moreReplace the word
technologically advanced
a
trend among Change preposition
of a
the
Correct article usage
apply
human
, especially Fix the agreement mistake
humans
Correct article usage
the young
young
generations and these types of meats Correct word choice
younger
made
lots of problems like obesity,reduce people's Verb problem
have
life
and Fix the agreement mistake
lives
also
these kinds of dishes an effect humans reproductivity.Additionally
, junk bread consists of toxic substances and also
it Rephrase
apply
has
not Verb problem
does
had
enough ingredients and sustainable elements, Wrong verb form
have
as a result
, they
Correct pronoun usage
it
affect
the nation's physical health. Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
For example
, presently, everywhere we can see fast snacks like sandwiches, hamburgers, hotdogs and so on.
Turning off the other hands
of argument,the basic advantage is that the costs of abroad grub very Fix the agreement mistake
hand
fewer
than other local cookings, and Correct word choice
lower
also
very convenient to eat .Because the community like to eat together at work instead
of selecting their time for dishes.However
, these types of meals become a reason to decrease people's immune systems.That's why the government should encourage the community to eat beneficial bread and if necessary they have to ban eating junk grub. For instance
, In my home ,country the population tend to eat our national meat despite famous junk foods.
In conclusion, I support this
statement and I think if societies want to live longer and healthier so
they have to Rephrase
apply
do
not eat fast foods.Unnecessary verb
apply
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