Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Despite the fact that there are countless restaurants
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the heart of the city, we still decided to go
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Korean
restaurant
on a rainy day. Strangely, none of us actually managed to remember the
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Korean name of the
restaurant
,
although
we have been there at least five times. The black wooden
door
of the
restaurant
was like someone who did not wish to hide
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façade of make-up and decided to wear his age plainly. The paint on the metallic
door
handle already started to peel off, sending
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up my arm as I tried to open the heavy
door
. As I opened the
door
, a wave of steam collided with my face and the strong, spicy scent of food creeped out
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restaurant
. Quickly closing the
door
behind us, my friends and I found a
table
near the window while taking off our wet coats and taking a closer look at the menu. Soon, a server came to our
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swift steps. He spoke German with a thick Korean accent and nodded with approval as we took our orders.
However
, we were soon interrupted by the server, as he returned with four glasses and a huge bottle of water. With a clinking sound, he set down the glasses on the
table
and went away as soundlessly as he had come. We stared at his back as he disappeared behind the counter and our conversation was restored over the pouring of water.
Finally
, after a long period of waiting, the server came once again towards us. Our conversation stopped abruptly as different
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dishes started to appear on the
table
. The
first
dish
was the traditional Tteokbokki, despite its simple ingredient, the
dish
was
nevertheless
a breathtaking one. Pure white simmered rice cake swam in the
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paste, constellated with greens scallions. Impatient, I took a bite of the soft rice cake and the electric taste of
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paste filled my mouth. Only after several bites, I
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as if there are thousands
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tiny needles on my tongue which I took as a sign to leave
this
dish
for a while. After turning my attention to other milder dishes, I realized that they definitely did not erode against the numbing one. The Odeng-tang was exactly the opposite of the previous
dish
, not only contrasting greatly in
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, but
also
in their tastes. Boiled fish cakes swam under the clear surface of the soup. Its fishy fragrance, lightened by pieces of Daikon, infuses the room and lingers in the air like
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on the glassy window.
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