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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students should encouraged to question and offer criticisms on their teachers. Others think this will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that some people believe that in order to achieve quality education, high school students ought to encourage to question and recommend their
teachers
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 related to criticisms. While other few persons think
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 method will lead to a loss of respect and discipline for their
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, in the classroom
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, if adolescents get a high-quality education, they should be inspired to question in the classroom by their
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. in the other words, a set of school rules must allow offering critical questions to their advisors.
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, the few particularly intellectual schools which have allowed to say criticism to
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, tend to get an improvement in education.
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, most high school students would take more reliability by saying criticism of their
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, which is why
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 system would
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 misunderstanding approach in the classroom.
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, students are not only
listened
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teachers
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' speeches but
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 do not respect them.
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, peers get used to
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 with one another by saying criticisms. in my opinion,
adolescent
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 should respect their
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 and not get out of the circular.
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teachers
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 must be inspired classmates in the class and give more motivation.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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