describe a personal experience that changed your life. Explain where it happened? who were you with?

The
night
before
last
was
one
of the worst nights I have ever had. Most of the nights I have an early
night
and sleep like a log, but that
night
was
one
of the nights that I was going to be wide awake for the whole
night
. I remember that I was worried sick because I had school in the morning, and I was not going to be able to get the right amount of sleep that I needed. I tried to make myself fall asleep, but nothing was helping the fact that it was three in the morning, and I haven’t had slept a wink. The
last
thing I
have
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in mind is that I was tossing and turning, and the
next
thing is that it was 9 in the morning. I realized that I didn’t wake up when my alarm clock had gone off. For
that
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I decided to have a lie-in tomorrow morning to equalize that
night
’s sleep, but
first
I had to get to school. I got up, got dressed and ran to school, and it was the
second
period that I fell asleep like a log in the middle of the class and woke up at the end of the period. When I was a teenager, I was living off my dad’s
money
and I was
one
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girls that only cared about my clothes and my make-up. I was very well
of
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at the
time
and was rolling in
money
. I was never careful with my
money
and would spend it in whatever way I found. Once I turned eighteen my dad kicked me out of the house. He was in debt because of me, was hard up and just angry at me. I had no
money
and
no where
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to live. I stayed at my friend’s house for a bit, but I realized I couldn’t live there forever, and that I had to start making some
money
to just cover making my ends meet. I started borrowing a lot of
money
from the people around me and I was running up a debt, but at the same
time
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I was in the red. I didn’t even have a penny, so I decided to sell most of my clothes just so I could manage
covering
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some of my costs. I knew I had to keep my head above water so I tried everything, I worked everywhere, sold everything I had and cut back on my extra expenses just so I could save a little
money
. Even right now, ten years later I am still living on a shoestring and just saving, but I can make at least my ends meet. There was a
time
that
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I was
over weighted
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, so I tried going on a diet. I cut down on eating junk food, I threw out all the candies and unhealthy snacks I had. I started going to the gym to burn some of the fat off. I would go fasting for a whole day and starve. I wanted to turn my body
to
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a body that I was satisfied with, so I decided to never give in and that I will achieve my goal
one
day I just have to do things
one
after another.
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time
I was hungry I made it normal for myself to rather than eating unhealthy snacks to heat up some cooked vegetables, or
to
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chop up some fruit.
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