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The bar chart demonstrates the
number
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 of foreign
students
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 in four English-speaking
countries
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 in 2004 and 2012 and the table gives us information about the
percentage
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 of foreign
students
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.
To begin
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 with, the
number
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 of
students
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 from abroad has increased significantly in all four
countries
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.
For instance
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, the
number
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 of foreign
students
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 went up approximately 20 per cent in the US.
In contrast
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, there was a substantial increase in the
number
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 of local
students
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 in the United States as well, since the
percentage
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 of
students
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 from abroad in the US has not changed. In other nationalities,
however
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, the
percentage
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 of
students
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 from abroad had a noticeable rise.
For example
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, we can see that in Australia there was a 5 per cent increase in the
percentage
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 of
students
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 from other nationalities. To conclude, there are more foreigners coming to English-speaking
countries
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 to study and
this
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 can be seen in all of these four
countries
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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