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SOME PEOPLE THINK YOUNG PEOPLE SHOULD BE REQUIRED TO HAVE FULL TIME EDUCATION UNTIL THEY ARE ATLEAST 18 YEARS OLD .TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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SOME GREY
PEOPLE
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 THINK THAT ADOLESCENTS SHOULD TAKE PART IN
STUDY
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 WITH HEART AND GIVE THEIR FULL TIME TO THEIR
STUDIES
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 UNTIL 18YEARS .SO THAT,THEY UNDERSTAND THE ROOT OF THE
STUDY
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 FOR THE
FURTHER
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 HIGHER
STUDIES
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.I WILL SHED ON LIGHT THE IMPORTANCE OF
STUDY
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 IN ONE'S
LIFE
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 . THE
FIRST
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 AND FOREMOST,EDUCATION PLAYS A PIVOTAL ROLE IN JUVENILLE'S
LIFE
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 .
FOR INSTANCE
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 , AFTER GETTING A HIGHER DEGREE ,THEY CAN GET A GOOD JOB AND MAKE THEIR
LIFE
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 EASY.
SECONDLY
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,THEY COULD UNDERSTAND EVERYTHING AND BE ABLE TO ANSWER THE QUESTIONS. AS LITERATE
PEOPLE
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 CAN DEBATE ANYTIME WITH ANYONE ONLY BECAUSE OF THEIR KNOWLEDGE.
THIRDLY
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 ,THE EARLY AGE EDUCATION IS LIKE THE PRINT ON THE MIND . WHATEVER WE LEARN TILL 18 YEARS WE CAN REMEMBER THAT LONG TIME .SO THESE YEARS ARE THE PREVIOUS FOR A PERSON .
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 , SOME
PEOPLE
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 THINK THAT KIDS SHOULD WORK ALONG WITH THEIR
STUDIES
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.AS RESULT ,THEY LEARN THE IMPORTANCE OF THE MONEY AND HARD WORK.
THEN
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 THEY WOULD SPEND THE MONEY
ACCORDINGLY
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.
BESIDES
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,THEY WILL UNDERSTAND THE REAL MEANING OF
STUDY
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 AND
LIFE
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 .
CONSEQUENTLY
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, THEY WOULD LIVE THEIR
LIFE
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 WITH THE HIGH THINKING . FOR ABROAD
STUDY
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 YOU SHOULD HAVE PASSED THE 12TH STANDARD ,YOU SHOULD CONCENTRATE ON
STUDIES
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 TO GO TO OVERSEA. AS WE KNOW WE DON'T HAVE ENOUGH JOBS IN INDIA . SO THE MOST OF THE
PEOPLE
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 GOING TO ABROAD FOR HIGHER
STUDY
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 . TO RECAPITULATE , WITHOUT
STUDY
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 WE CAN NOT MAKE MONEY AND NEVER LIVE A HIGH STANDARD OF
LIFE
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 . TO EARN
SUCH
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 A
LIFE
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 WE HAVE TO
STUDY
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 PROPERLY WITH KNOW THE VALUES OF OUR SURROUNDINGS . IN
THIS
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 PARENTS SHOULD GIVE THEM LESSON AND HELP THEM TO GET THEIR GOAL .
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