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Allowing young children to do an enjoyable activity can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#children #activity #skills #creativity
Over the years, as we had evolved as
homosepians
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homosexuals
 from an animal; the
tennagers
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teenagers
 learning capability has changed in the same way
comparing
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 to
last
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 five
decade
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. The thought of giving access to either
tennager's
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teenager's
 favourite activity or reading a book in order to enhance the
skills
 of an individual can be debatable.
Thus
,
this
 essay is going to address the given statement in
neutral
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 manner.
To begin
 with, in today's era , we cannot ignore the importance of practical exposure to
digitalised
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the digitalised
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 world that becomes most popular in adolescent age to grow themselves, having said that, a child adopts various
skills
 to grow,
for
instance
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 one of the richest man Elon Musk is growing his empire by investing his time in his favourite activity.
Additionally
, there are
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instances
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instancies
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instances
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 where
childeren
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children
has
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 born with god
giffted
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gifted
 and inherent
skills
 helping them to grow faster in a particular field
such
 as young entrepreneurs usually
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 a business background.
However
, we can not ignore the importance of reading as well because it is a
pioneer
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 step to
grow
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 required
skills
 to succeed in the future in order to support we can take the example of
Mr.
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 APJ Abdul Kalam who came from the
mediocare
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mediocre
 simple living background , but he became the great
scientiest
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scientist
scientists
 who
launch
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first
 nuclear weapon by
studing
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studying
studied
 thoroughly in his teenage time.
Furthermore
, the reading
habbit
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habit
 is a great help to
the
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introvert
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 teenager; indeed , we are in
the
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 era where physical activity is diminishing due to the availability of
social
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 online
platform
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platforms
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. To put my pen down, it can be said that it depends upon the children's capability and preference of medium through which they would like to
successed
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succeed
 in their life, along with it, we can not eliminate the idea of digitalised, god gifted
skills
 and the family background too.
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