Parents should spend more time with their children helping them with their homework. Agree/disagree?

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many
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not get enough
time
to spend with their
children
however
they should give ample
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their
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time
to their homework.
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notable for
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complication
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their
children
may face in higher studies. On the one hand, it is important to spare some
time
from our routine in order to track our
child
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education
and how well they are performing in their studies. It
also
helps them to create a
more
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stronger bond with each other. In
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, it becomes much easier for them to notice in any case their
children
need some extra attention on any particular subject to improve scores
may
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and may
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be child hesitant
in asking
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their doubts in class or in front of the teacher. Because
this
is the only
time
when
parents
can create their
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children
education
base.
For instance
, When I was in primary studies, I
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uncomfortable asking questions to my tutors and my
parents
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the same,
therefore
they usually helped me in my
education
and because of their valuable
time
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I was always a topper in my university.
On the other hand
, those who don’t concentrate on their
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children
homework and remain busy with work or anything inclining their
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children
future towards the dark side,
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this
may lead them to confusing conditions where they probably can not differentiate between good or bad regards
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further
education
or in selecting a career.
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in 2016 shows that
parents
who fail to manage
time
with their
children
during their study times
are
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often
seen
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their
children
dealing with many mental problems.
Hence
,
parents
should look after their
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children
education
and spare as much
time
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they can in order to build their
child
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confidence and each other bond
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental involvement
  • academic development
  • parent-child relationship
  • supported and encouraged
  • confidence and independence
  • educational strategies
  • autonomous learning
  • foster a love for learning
  • tailored interventions
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