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Band 4

Parents should spend more time with their children helping them with their homework. Agree/disagree?

#parents #time #children #homework
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In today’s busy
life
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life,
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 many
parents
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did
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do
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 not get enough
time
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 to spend with their
children
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however
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 they should give ample
of
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their
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time
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 to their homework.
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am
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100% concur with
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 essay's advice.
Firstly
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this
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 essay will discuss why
its
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it is
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 notable for
parents
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 and afterwards will explain what
would be
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the
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complication
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 their
children
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 may face in higher studies. On the one hand, it is important to spare some
time
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 from our routine in order to track our
child
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child's
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education
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 and how well they are performing in their studies. It
also
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 helps them to create a
more
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stronger bond with each other. In
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, it becomes much easier for them to notice in any case their
children
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 need some extra attention on any particular subject to improve scores
may
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and may
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 be child hesitant
in asking
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to ask
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 their doubts in class or in front of the teacher. Because
this
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 is the only
time
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 when
parents
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 can create their
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children's
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children
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education
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 base.
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 , When I was in primary studies, I
feel
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felt
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 uncomfortable asking questions to my tutors and my
parents
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know
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 the same,
therefore
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 they usually helped me in my
education
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 and because of their valuable
time
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I was always a topper in my university.
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 , those who don’t concentrate on their
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children's
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children
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 homework and remain busy with work or anything inclining their
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children's
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children
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 future towards the dark side,
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this
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 may lead them to confusing conditions where they probably can not differentiate between good or bad regards
to
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further
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education
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 or in selecting a career.
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oxford university
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Oxford University
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 in 2016 shows that
parents
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 who fail to manage
time
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 with their
children
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 during their study times
are
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often
seen
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see
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 their
children
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 dealing with many mental problems.
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 ,
parents
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 should look after their
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children's
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children
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education
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 and spare as much
time
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as
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they can in order to build their
child
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children's
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confidence and each other bond
stronger
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental involvement
  • academic development
  • parent-child relationship
  • supported and encouraged
  • confidence and independence
  • educational strategies
  • autonomous learning
  • foster a love for learning
  • tailored interventions
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