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some people say that it's better to teach language students in small classes, whereas others think the number of people does not matter. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #language #students #classes #matter
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really
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lot of researchers tried to study it and make it easier and more beneficial . Some people believe that
number
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students
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 them and do not consider the
number
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students
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 I do support the idea that
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 to reduce the
number
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 in each class for some reasons. In the following
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 we will discuss both ideas and try to
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Firstly
, some people are very strict
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 the idea that saying the
number
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students
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. They always
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focus
focuses
 on the
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 effort and the tools they use.
Also
 , they do think the high
number
 of
students
 is an advantage !! because
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 it makes communication among
students
 much easier.
Second
, in complete contrast , other people
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 against of increasing
number
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students
 in one class. I strongly
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support
 them because
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 the high
number
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students
 always
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 the teachers and
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bad
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 on them.
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Also
 , the
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teachers
 can not deliver information to all of them. In conclusion, I do believe in education as the only way of improving any society and solving
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human problems.
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 why I support the quality of education than the
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quantity
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