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In many countries, fewer and fewer people go to universities to study science. What’s the reason for this? What can be done to encourage people to learn science.

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 lot of countries, a few numbers of
students
 are interested to study
science
 at
university
.
This
 is why the
students
 are feeling that
science
 is a more difficult subject rather than others. There are many
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 to encourage
people
 to learn
science
. I will discuss in the following paragraph that's why
people
 are demotivated in learning
science
 at
university
.
Firstly
, the main reason is that many
students
is
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 chosen the simple subject which is more likely to increase their economic factors like account, math and English. It is
also
 believed that
students
 have started
a
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apply
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new
jobs
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 after completing
of
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apply
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diploma level education. So, they are not interested in
further
. More to get a
university
 education. In the case of
science
 subject in
university
, a few
of
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student wants to get a certificate
of
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from
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 the
university
 only to get more knowledge and
also
 to
upgrading
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 their post.
Secondly
, the
people
, who have a certificate
of
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from
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university
, express their experience that
science
 is not a need-based knowledge, it is just for getting
high
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a high
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 level of knowledge.
therefore
,
people
 do not want to go to
university
. To change their concept, the authority of the
university
 as well as the government should arrange a programme and seminar that can show the effectiveness of the
scence
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science
scene
scent
. To conclude, to make
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