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Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development?

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There is no denying the fact that cutting-edge technology is ubiquitous across the globe due to its paramount importance. One school of thought opines that installing copyright songs and
books
 conveniently is worth it, whilst others disagree and consider that a couple of problems
also
 occur because of the same.
Although
this
 has a plethora of merits, there are
also
 numerous demerits which will be elaborate
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 upcoming paragraphs. Initiating with the best possible benefits, the most significant advantage is people can listen to copyright artists and read novels easily with the help of advanced technology.
In other words
,
latest
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 technology has developed a lot of applications through which music and
books
 can be installed and enjoyed
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free of cost at a touch of a button.
For instance
, a web developer introduced the world to Spotify
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which humans can download millions of songs from all over the world at any time from the internet. On its paradoxical side, there are many drawbacks as well.
First
 and foremost, if people download songs and
books
 from the internet for free, it will affect the artist's and author's main source of income. To put it simply, downloading music and
books
 from the internet for free
instead
 of buying albums,
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cassette
cassettes
 and
books
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 can cause financial damage to them.
As a result
,
this
 can demotivate them.
Moreover
, their mental health could
also
 be affected by
such
 adverse ramifications. To conclude, without any
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,
this
 is a mixed bag. Given that
this
 topic has many pros, the cons of
this
 notion may not be underestimated.
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