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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued whether we are more independent or dependent on
such
 a modern world. While it is true that we now cannot live without others in some aspects, I believe that we are living a more independent life. There could be two main reasons for the argument in favour of dependent life.
First
, with the development of industry, people mostly focus on a specific field, which means that without others’ efforts, the necessary products or the entertainment equipment,
such
 as food, clothes and smartphone, cannot be attained.
Besides
 that, the services
also
 prove the connection between the supplier and the consumer.
For example
, shopping online is a usual consumption convention for most modern people, especially for young adults. It is others that deliver the consumption to the consumers. In modern society, living without others’ contributions seems to be unrealistic.
On the other hand
, advanced technologies provide opportunities for citizens to avoid communicating face to face. Activities that had to be completed in person can be finished through the Internet.
For instance
, more person prefers to buy their needs online since it is more convenient, more redundant and cheaper. In the meantime, learning online has become an ordinary way for most students to access education. In
this
 way, it is more flexible to absorb knowledge, particularly for the adults who have jobs during the day. When it comes to career, independence seems to be more obvious. In some companies, employees are not required to work on seats. The communication between colleagues is less than before, and the contact between the staff and their managers is fewer as well. In conclusion,
although
 we live to rely on others’ efforts to some extent, I believe that we are more independent than we were used to being.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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