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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In many ,nations youth are encouraged to maintain a
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 of at least one year after completing higher studies and before taking admitted to the university.In
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, will elaborate on the advantages of the same.
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, will explain what kind of impact can have while choosing the right career in
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 academics. On one hand, it's to be said that
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 will give more exposure to
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 for choosing the right career and
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 helps them find their talent.
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,
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 brings a huge opportunity to experience various types of jobs. Many
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 do not know the value of money as they are dependent on their parents until their high education
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 step leads them to a better understanding of management in regards to earning and saving.
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, meeting and dealing with different people and cultures will help them to build more self-confidence and keep them motivated.
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, a study done by the Education Department of Oxford University USA found that people who had study
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 are more confident than
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 with no gaps. On other hand, there are a lot of issues that many youngsters get distracted and quit
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 studies because few jobs provide handsome salaries that they don't expect after completing their university education.To elaborate more, sometimes many youngsters get manipulated by bad people around them which unfortunately leads them into the crime path.
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, If any student is not able to find any job during
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 definitely provokes them to seek criminal or brings them into
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 a situation where they for sure lose all hopes and confidence. In conclusion, having
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 can bring a lot of experience and exposure to many cultures but at the same ,time it totally depends on which path one should choose that helps them in choosing subjects in
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 studies which lead their future to live a comfortable life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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