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Writing Samples
Band 6

Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter describe what you like about the library say what you don't like make suggestions for improvements

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Dear Mr. Antony, Hi, I just saw the announcement that they want to make modifications and I would like to give my opinion. I have been spending a lot of time in your
library
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. Good times and good books,
as well as
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 a great combination of friends, entertainment and reading,
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are

It seems that the verb is does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 what many think of their
library
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 experiences. Lots of people love the
library
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, I certainly do and they are always ready to have a story to tell about how great the
library
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 is or was for them.
For
Change preposition
On

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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another
Correct determiner usage
the

It seems that determiner use may be incorrect here.

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hand
Correct word choice
other hand

There may be an adjective issue here.

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, sometimes people
doesn´t
Change the verb form
don´t

The verb does does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 go because there are
kind
Fix the agreement mistake
kinds

It seems that kind may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 of problems
about
Change preposition
with

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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rules
Correct article usage
the rules

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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.
For example
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, phone ringing, loud conversations, you can smell of
foods
Fix the agreement mistake
food

It seems that foods may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 of someone
then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 If you are in a row in the central area, every few minutes someone will come and go, I could name many things but I don´t want to extend it too much. I would like to make some suggestions to improve some things. Put
sings
Correct your spelling
signs

The word sings doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 with rules [don´t eat, don´t make noise], better organize circulation for walking and make it open 24 hours a day. I look forward to hearing from you David

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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to clarify and separate different points into distinct paragraphs for clarity.
Grammar
Ensure consistent subject-verb agreement, e.g., 'people doesn’t go' should be 'people don’t go'.
Task Achievement
Elaborate on each point with specific examples to strengthen your suggestions.
Greeting & Closing Style
The letter has clear and courteous greetings and conclusions, establishing good tone.
Task Response
The letter addresses both positive and negative aspects of the library, meeting the task requirements.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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