With increasing population and ever-growing urban centres, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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In recent years, in urban areas ratio of population is increasing significantly, while in between

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countries are losing their natural destinations.

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to resolve it.

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, our countries are mostly famous for attractions which are came out of natural things and

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natural air is not coming purely as well as we are

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our natural

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which are making harm to our beauty spot and take action on it ,while

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in my city builder is making their project on

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many people make

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government should make stricter low and take care of our natural beauty for our future generation.

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