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With increasing population and ever-growing urban centres, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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In recent years, in urban areas ratio of population is increasing significantly, while in between
this
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 countries are losing their natural destinations.
This
 essay will not only highlight the problems associated with
this
 issue but
also
 present some potential
measure
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 to resolve it.
Firstly
, our countries are mostly famous for attractions which are came out of natural things and
this
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are
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disapearing
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disappearing
 day by day.
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, the beautiful seas are
converting
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 into high rise skyscrapers, These things are not good for
environment
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the environment
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 and for
human
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also
.
As a result
,
becasue
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because
 of
this
 natural air is not coming purely as well as we are
inhalling
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inhaling
 polluted air.
Secondly
, the only reason to
protecting
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 our natural
besuty
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beauty
 place is to make some stricter rules.
Furthermore
,
government
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the government
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 should stop
constrution
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construction
 which are making harm to our beauty spot and take action on it ,while
authority
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the authority
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take
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penalty
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a penalty
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 from the people and give punishment.
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,
i
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 read in
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today's
todays
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today's
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news paper
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newspaper
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 in my city builder is making their project on
garden
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the garden
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,
hence
 many people make
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an objection
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objection
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on
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 it and
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stopped
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stoped
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 the construction. To sum up, we are only responsible for our surroundings,
however
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,however
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 government should make stricter low and take care of our natural beauty for our future generation.
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