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The consumption of the world’s resources(oil and water, etc.) Is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are causes and solutions?

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In today's modernized era, the rate of the overconsumption of many reserves
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 as oil, water and so on is growing.
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 essay will discuss a number of causes for
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 phenomenon and, provide possible solutions for them. One justification often given for the increasing trend is the tendency of the authorities in order to achieve remarkable accomplishments in each industrial section.
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 to say, today's resources are affected by economic situations which is a competitive domain in every nation. Take the United States as the most patently obvious example, capitalism system pavement the path for overconsumption of every single resource because they think they have the right to consume natural resources.
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, there are no other substitutes for the governments to replace the reserves. There are many solutions that should be taken into consideration when it comes to natural heritage. The government have to set some guidelines or even strict punishments for the institutes and companies which focused on their benefits without considering human race profits.
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, Sweden applied penalties against industry sectors that refused to obey the rules and, do not implement those laws.
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, it is culture-building that has a paramount impact in restricting consumption so as to decline its rate. More specially, many folks are following the given path from the governments and society In conclusion,
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 nowadays we are facing a global crisis in overconsumption of natural resources, we have a possible solution that can be effective in reducing the rate of
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 trend.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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