Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that family are in charge of training the
children
as a good
member
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of the society, while others think
school
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has
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a more
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important role in preparing
children
as a good
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of the society. To
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family and
school
both are the main places which have
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influence on forming
children
's personalities, and none of them cannot be ignored. The
first
three to four years of
children
’s life
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mostly spent in the family and they are in the exposure to their parent’s behaviour, it can be the golden age of their life in developing personalities. Social values, good behaviour and many other rules and regulation can be taught during these years and stick in
children
’s minds. Family is like the institution where personality is formed. Basic rules
such
as communicating with others, sharing food or toys, and being polite are examples of attitudes that are formed in a family and make the
children
prepare for a bigger community like
school
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has
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responsibility for growing
children
's awareness of being a good and productive
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of the society. As
children
are in exposure to different people with different attitudes at
school
their
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characteristics
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form and sometimes change for
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.The way that teachers behave, communicate,
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something from students can influence them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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