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Some people think that people should choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family. Do you think money is an important factor when choosing a job? What other factors should be considered?

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It is quite often debated that a
career
 should be chosen based on income to meet the daily living necessities.
Although
 a higher salary is sought after, in my view there are other elements that need to be considered for a better living, which I am going to discuss in
this
 essay. On the
one
 hand, income tops the list of key criteria to choose
one
's profession for varied reasons. It pays the bills, puts food on the table, and provides a better standard of living. In developing countries, the inflation rate is growing higher when compared to developed countries.
For example
, In India, food prices are directly linked to petrol and diesel prices and they increase in proportion to fuel prices.
Hence
 people are forced to choose a
career
 that promises better income.
On the other hand
, there are quite a few other key factors that need to be considered.
Firstly
, the profession should be an honourable
one
,
this
 provides a reputable image for the individual in the society.
For example
, doctors have a respectable image in society.
Next
, the
career
 should be a sustainable and long-lasting
one
, it should not be that it is outlived for a few years only and the person is forced into a mid-life crisis.
Lastly
, the job should provide a better work-life balance and promote the physical and mental well being of the individual. To conclude as
such
, though money is
one
 of the primary deciding factors for choosing a
career
, in my opinion, the aforementioned factors should
also
 be considered for a better living.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • job satisfaction
  • fulfillment
  • mental health
  • aligns with
  • productive career
  • career progression
  • growth potential
  • work-life balance
  • flexible hours
  • telecommuting
  • vacation time
  • professional responsibilities
  • working environment
  • corporate culture
  • toxic environment
  • stress and burnout
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