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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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"Own a house or just rent a house to live in?" To a large number of individuals,
this
 is really significant. Every
person
's desire to possess a house serves as a powerful motivation. It will,
however
, turn negative if it places pressure on each individual without considering their strengths and the goal of their efforts. Housing is usually an indicator of a
person
's capacity to work and how successful they are in life in many various countries. The majority may be readily recognized in Asian countries. It's nearly a must to buy a property, and it's
also
 their major objective in life.
This
 does not imply that they are capable of sustaining themselves and starting a family on their own after they are no longer under their parents' care. It's
also
 about accumulating personal riches in order to better and stabilize their most fundamental lives.
On the other hand
,
this
 isn't precisely a widespread problem in European and North American countries. According to CBRE figures, the rental rate in the United States is 35%, Canada is 31%, the United Kingdom is 33%, Germany is 47%, Australia is 33%, France is 37%, and Switzerland is 56%. In industrialized nations, rental rates in major cities
such
 as New York and London are often high, with 54
percent
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 and 41
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, respectively, while Amsterdam has a rental rate of above 70
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." (Source of
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.vn). There are several advantages to renting rather than purchasing a property. One of them is to handle financial and demographic challenges,
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 use (living; sublease; business). Is it appropriate to make things tough for ourselves just because of housing issues, since it may vary on each
person
's tastes, surroundings, and financial means? It is not always true that someone who owns a home is wealthier and more successful than someone who lives in a leased home. Because each
person
 is under various pressures, we cannot create a common aim for the majority
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 others to do blindly and
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 efforts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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