Some people think it is better for children to have many short holidays during the year. Others believe that it would be beneficial to have fewer, longer vocations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe it is conducive for

children

to have small frequent

holidays

in a year while others deny

this

fact that less but long

vocations

are good for them.

This

essay will discuss both views and

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my own opinion in the conclusion.

To begin

with, a segment of society is in favour of small and frequent breaks during the course of one year for

children

as it may act

like

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a

stress

buster for them. To clarify,

since

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nowadays study’s difficulty level has been ramped up so high, resulting in

a

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huge

stress

among

children

.

Hence

,

this

approach may help them to release their

stress

and regain their energy for

studies

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.

Moreover

, if

frequency

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of small

holidays

is high,

children

may spend enough time with their parents and

this

may lead to

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bond between them.

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a survey conducted by Oxford University, in March

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2016 manifestly unveiled that

children

found many small

holidays

beneficial for them,

this

helped them not only to cope with study

stress

but

also

to

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strengthen

their bonds with family members.

On the contrary

, fewer and long

vocations

have their own pros in the form of better concentration and exploration of innate qualities. To elucidate,

children

can contribute more in their academics with their full capacity if there are fewer but long

vocations

for them.

In addition

,

children

can improve their inner talents like dancing and painting during these long

vocations

as these activities

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time. To conclude, people demand small and frequent

vocations

for

children

in a year, in my opinion, long but fewer

holidays

are the best suitable for

children

due to immense focus on studies and improvement in inner skills.