It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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physical traits or family, but some disagree and believe that it to be acquired by
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practising
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experience
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both
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is the truth. In terms of born
talent
, physical traits are a crucial factor. When it comes to sports or
music
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deniable that some are more
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physically
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thus
being what some call talented from birth. In
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, a basketball player towering at 200 cm is more talented
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one
possessing only 180 cm.
Furthermore
,
talent
is inherited.
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excelling
in some aspect has been shown to run in a family,
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members
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inclination
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of singer
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like the
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Bani family. On the
one
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experience
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a role in success. Some say that the best teacher in life
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experiance
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experience
experiences
experienced
and time,
this
also
applies in sport or
music
letting from every failure and
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achievement
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participant
participants
can learn. To give an example, Luca Toni ,FC Baryn striker, rose to
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stardom
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late 30's .
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perfect.
Music
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usually
very
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technical
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requering
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a lot of time dedicated to
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there
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respectical
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respective
skills to master to reach the top of
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field. To illustrate, Carlo Santan , a legendary guitar player, is said to play for 6 hours every day in
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youth. In
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conclusion
, I agree
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views the
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talent
as
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something
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with via physical trait or via the family and with the other saying it could be
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achieved
through
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experience
and practice, as we can see that those who
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achieved
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greatest
greatness
are
both
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talented
and hardworking.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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