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Nowadays agriculture improve a lot and farmers can produce a lot of food for people. But many countries have problem for foot shortage. what should they do?

#agriculture #farmers #food #people #countries #foot #shortage
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Nowadays agriculture improve a
lot
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 and farmers can produce a
lot
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 of food for people. But many
countries
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 have
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a problem
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problem
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for
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 foot
shortage
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. I think many
countries
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 do not have
good
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 situation for agriculture
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 as a farm,enough water and good water.Farmers need
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new technology and these things are expensive and most
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the people can not buy them.
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.
government
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 should help and they must give loans that agriculture can buy these devices and they can work with them and improve
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 of their products. I believe that, when a country
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 not have
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 excellent farm,
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government
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 should make a suitable land for
agrecultures
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agriculture
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do
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 not have enough water,
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government
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 has to teach farmers that work with
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 method .
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,
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 should provide new technology and devices.so,
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these
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 way
countries
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 do not have
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problem
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 and they can solve
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problem
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 very quickly but these ways related to that governments should have a
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 of money.
unfortunatly
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unfortunately
,
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problem
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 a
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 of
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 is that they do not have enough budget. To sum up,I think if
reach
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countries
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 help poor
countries
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 ,they can solve
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 and we do not have people in the world.
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