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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Traffic
 jam is a big
problem
 for
transportation
 worldwide, causing an increase in
car
 ownership. From my perspective, I strongly agree that using the owner's
car
 is a cause of
traffic
 jams for many
reasons
. The following paragraph will investigate my point of view and suggest some solutions for the
government
 to solve the
problem
. In my opinion,
traffic
 congestion is caused by many
reasons
. One of the primary
reasons
 is the increase of
cars
 by a higher population and economic development. The other
reasons
people
 use their
cars
 are the poor structure of public
transportation
, including the subway and the bus.
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 economy has developed in a big city because countryside
people
 come to work and live in an urban area.
Furthermore
, poor
transportation
 forced
people
 to have an owner's
car
 or motorcycle.
For instance
, Bangkok has
traffic
 jams all day, especially during rush hours, because a school and an office are tufted inside the city,
such
 as Silom. To solve the
problem
, there are several things that
government
 can do.
First
, the
government
 should provide convenient, clear, and safe public transport facilities to encourage
people
 to leave their
cars
 at home and use public transport
instead
.
Second
, the
government
 should create a policy on road transport.
For example
, South Korea has developed a particular lane for a bus and a
car
 with more than four
people
. If you have the same destination as your friend or family, you can sit in the exact vehicle to reduce the number of
cars
.
This
 can help to reduce the
problem
. In conclusion,
traffic
 jams are mainly dramatic for
car
 users and poor public
transportation
. The
government
 should solve
this
problem
 by developing public transit and encouraging
people
 to use it.
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