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some people believe that it is better to accept the bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is better to imprve such situations.

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Every individual has different acceptance levels of their current situation. Some
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 are of the opinion that, it is better to accept difficult circumstances while others advocate attempts to
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 hard and overcome
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 situations. In the scope of
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 essay, both views will be thoroughly discussed. Personally, I side with the latter view. On the one hand,
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 tend to find satisfaction in their bad situations, be it an economical crisis or an unsatisfactory profession. In fact,
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 is mainly because
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 individuals do not have any other option but to survive in these conditions.
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, most university students face difficulty in finding a job that matches their degree status but ,
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 they are often forced to
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 in unsatisfactory conditions and maybe get bullied at
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.
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 kind of situation makes a person mentally unhealthy.
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, these
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 accept these circumstances just for the sake of earning money and livelihood.
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, working hard to overpower
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 conditions can help to advance in a professional career as well as lead a successful life. In fact, there are many examples throughout history of
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 who became successful by conquering difficult circumstances. Take an example, Christiano Ronaldo was born to a financially backward family and had no money to receive training for football or join a club.
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, he took many part-time jobs later in his teenage years and worked hard.
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 of his constant struggle, he was selected for the Portugal national football team. To conclude, in my opinion,
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 it is common for
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 to accept their situations, in order to advance in their career and succeed in life, they should overpower the obstacles and
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 hard as hard
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 always pays off.

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