More and more students choose to move to other countries to study their higher education. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays it is true, that most students
nowadays
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prefer to
study
abroad in order to get
Bachelor's
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a Bachelor's
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or Master's degree.
People
argue and dispute about
this
topic, whether they must
study
in their
country
or in a foreign
country
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On the one hand, studying abroad definitely benefits and allows students a lot of opportunities.
For instance
, they become familiar with foreign
culture
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cultures
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, history,
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and lifestyle
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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,
learn
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and learn
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their language easily, which helps them to broaden their mind and
to
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become
well- known
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well-known
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person
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people
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.
Moreover
, doors of universities from all over the world are open for learners
,
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and
also
offer entrances to a wide range of
study
fields. These opportunities attract applicants from overseas and they move to another
country
.
On the other hand
, it is really surprising to choose to
study
in another
country
, when there are many universities, colleges or institutions in the motherland. The drawbacks of studying abroad are high.
For example
, the contract of foreign universities,
cost
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the cost
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of accommodation and other living needs are expensive, to get a diploma is really difficult and it is another problem.
Nevertheless
, with
this
diploma students with a huge forecast cannot apply for a job in their
country
. To pay for them they have to work in their free time
instead
of studying their subject and it leads to a lack of knowledge but spending money. Parents have to support with money their son or daughter.
To conclude
, I realize that studying in another continent or neighbour
country
has more plus than a minus because I believe, that
people
who
study
abroad have a chance to increase not only their love for their motherland, in spite of the fact that they miss
people
, way of living in their hometown but
also
they respect
people
from overseas.
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