Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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should not provide monetary benefits to Use synonyms
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elderly citizens because it is the duty of every citizen to be ready for Correct article usage
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For instance
, a working individual can always opt for a suitable pension scheme and save a part of their monthly income towards their pension account which can be withdrawn with interest only when they are retired. Linking Words
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, these actions when initiated well in advance yield great benefits in terms of financial security for an elderly Linking Words
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individuals
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government
to cover their expenses.
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government
should act humanely Use synonyms
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toward
people
who cannot Use synonyms
support
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people
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retirement
due to their existing circumstances. Use synonyms
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part of the country and should not be neglected whatsoever.
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government
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support
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite