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Some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel thier funtionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The architecture of
property
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the property
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 attracts most
people
. In our society,
although
 some
people
 believe that the structure of the building should be the main matter,
other
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others
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 think that the operations of the town take more value. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views.
To begin
 with, the design of the building is the main reason for the attraction in most cases.
For example
, in foreign countries, there are many beautiful architectural goods are designed, and generations come to see these.
Secondly
, memorial ownership
such
 as the Taj Mahal, Golden Temple, and many more places increase the beauty of the cities.
Thirdly
, if the towns are built beautifully,
then
 it increases tourism in that area and businesses
also
 expand as well. On there
other hand
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, the service must be excellent
also
. There are many hospitals, and schools that do not provide better facilities even though, they have good architecture.
Moreover
, if the functionality of the town will be good
then
people
 will gain more knowledge services, and they will not have to run to other cities. In my opinion, both have their own important place. Culture does not attractive if buildings do not look good, and
people
 will not like to live in a city without good facilities.
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