Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, some
people
prefer to travel to other
countries
for fun and entertainment. Some
people
say that it is not profitable for the
countries
that
people
prefer to travel to. I completely disagree with
this
statement. In the
next
essay
Add a comma
,essay
show examples
I will explain why it is more beneficial,
although
it has some negative consequences.
To begin
with, I think that exactly tourism industry is one of the main industries that provide employment for the population of a specific region.
This
sector promotes
economic
Add an article
the economic
show examples
growth of the country,
also
Correct word choice
and also
show examples
brings foreign currency, which contributes to the
enhancing
Replace the word
enhancement
show examples
of its currency at the international level. Tourists have always been and will be an important part of any country, as their travel
increase
Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
show examples
many sectors,
such
as hotel accommodation, taxi fare, visits to local shops, infrastructure, etc.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the Kazakh government showed that the survival of approximately 15% of the world's
countries
depends mainly on tourists. Another important point in the tourism industry is, of course, the mutual exchange of culture, food and lifestyle.
For example
, whenever foreigners visit a country, most of them prefer the respective cuisine to avoid health problems while
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
show examples
, so to provide
this
need, their appropriate food is adapted to tourist destinations.
For example
, in Germany, most
travelers
Change the spelling
travellers
show examples
are Americans, and
as a result
, American burgers have become so widespread that they have become part of the German cuisine and even the city
Hamburg
Change preposition
of Hamburg
show examples
has been renamed in
honor
Change the spelling
honour
show examples
of
this
American dish. In conclusion, unless there are extraordinary bad conditions visiting other states would not have a negative impact on the
countries
.
On the contrary
, I believe that it is very beneficial for each member of the
countries
and
people
should do
these kind
Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
show examples
of journeys.
Submitted by zhadyra.serikbayeva2016 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
What to do next:
Look at other essays: