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These days, more and more business meetings and business training are taking place online. Do advantages of this change outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the advance of technology
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, there are more companies than ever
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utilizing
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internet
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the internet
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 for their
business
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meetings
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 and
trainings
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training
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. It is agreed by most
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business
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businesses
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 that these
meetings
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 and
trainings
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training
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 are
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cost saving
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 and easy to
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 online. To start with, virtual
meetings
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 are convenient for businesses
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 for those
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international
 enterprises.
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,
instead
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traveling
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 to another office for the meeting, the employee can stay in their office, as meeting through
online
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 platform is
cost
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 and time effective, which allows them to concentrate on
work
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 project.
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, with regard
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 the pandemic
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 years, it is proven that
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online
meetings
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 are beneficial to the worker’s health as
it
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they
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 minimise the risk of contacting the COVID-19.
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 the popularity of holding
meeting
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meetings
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 online has
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 an increasing trend.
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 more, online
trainings
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training
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 are adopted by many companies since
it
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they
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 can provide
realtime
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real-time
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 evaluations for the user and the
business
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 itself.
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, some online training platforms require
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the user
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user
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users
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 to undertake tests and quizzes after training, in order to
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evaluate
 the effectiveness
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skill
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/ knowledge delivered and provide feedback to both the employee and the company.
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,
these training material
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this training material
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such
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 as videos and documents can be reuse
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over time
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overtime
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over time
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 and reduce the
cost
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 to the company, while the quality of training
are
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 ensured with the test system. Overall, with the increasing number of companies adopting online
meetings
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 and training for the
business
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, it is obvious that time and
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cost saving
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 outweighs the
disadvanages
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disadvantages
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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