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Every country should have a free health service even if this means that the latest treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive. To that extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#country #health #service #treatments
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As the healthcare system grows prosperously, more and more countries enjoy good
health
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services
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.
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, there are still some peoples who don't have the ability to afford therapies.
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, some
people
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 consider all nations should have free
health
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services
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 even without the latest cures. As far as I am concerned, I highly agree with
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 viewpoint as I think it can ensure safety and it is
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 fair.
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 with, free
health
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services
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 can give everyone the opportunity to get
treatments
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 and ensure safety. As some
people
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, especially middle-class families or
people
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 in poverty may not have enough financial support to pay the high bill of a cure, they may consider not to having a treatment, which can lamentably deteriorate the illnesses. The free service gives
people
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 chances to enjoy treatment regardless of their background and finances.
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, they can see a doctor on time which preserves their
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 and safety.
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, the free-of-charge policy is fair as
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 can choose
treatments
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 based on their ability.
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, the rich can have the latest
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 if they want as they can pay the high price while
people
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 who need the free
services
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 can
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 have the right to heal.
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, it guarantees all citizens can have
health
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services
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 but
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 remain differences between
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. In a conclusion, I strongly agree that nations should have free
health
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services
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 as it can protect the poor from severe illness and
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 be fair.
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