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some countries have spent a large amount of money on bicycles. Why has this happened? Is it the best way to solve traffic problems?

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Bicycle
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 is a totally sustainable means of
transport
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 in today's world. It is said that some countries have invested heavily in
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 forms of
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This
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of
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 spending a sizable amount of money on
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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. In my opinion,
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 it is a fruitful solution in order to address
traffic
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 problems, it is not the best
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. There are two main causes for investing in the
bicycle
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 industry.
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, the environment will be positively affected by the use of
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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. Since most
people
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 can benefit from cycling
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 of private cars, fossil fuels consumption is more likely to reduce, which can ultimately prevent aggravating air pollution. If
people
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 had used more
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bicycle
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, we would not have witnessed the air pollution.
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, when the majority of
people
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 are more
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willing
 to take advantage of bicycles in daily life
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 as going to work, they are able to burn off some calories and get physical activities so as to avoid a sedentary lifestyle. Despite the above significant effects of using
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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, increased investment in
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public transportation would be the best solution in order to tackle
traffic
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jam
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, when public
transport
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 is upgraded, city dwellers will be less inclined to use private cars.
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, not only
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 it encourage
people
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 to use public transportation
,
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 but
also
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 relieves road congestion. Take as an example a country that has
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efficient public
transport
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. The more the number of train users increases, the more
traffic
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 congestion will probably reduce
effeciently
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efficiently
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This
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, in turn, will limit
traffic
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 at peak hours. In conclusion, less air pollution and improving the level of health can be motives for some countries to spend money cycling.
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, cycling may not be the best measure that governments have taken to remedy
traffic
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jam
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.

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