An increasing number of children are overweight which could result in many problems when they grow older both in terms of their health and health care costs. Why do you think so many children are overweight? What could be done to solve this problem?
Nowadays children's obesity is getting one of the major concerns due to enormous number of kids suffering from
huge
number of problems related to health ,as well as health care expenses Change the article
a huge
the huge
which
may occur as they grow up .There are a wide variety of causes which can be considered as the source of Correct pronoun usage
that
this
issue.Following some of the reasons ,and also
solutions will be discussed.
Firstly
, technological devices have led into
immobility which is the main reason Change preposition
to
of
gaining weight. Change preposition
for
For instance
,they lie on the sofa for long hours to play games ,chat with their friends on social media and watch films.What's more, they lose their motivation to do exercise or have physical activities such
as going to the gym or sports clubs.In addition
, watching tons of advertisements of
fast food might persuade them to consume a lot of them like pizzas and hamburgers which are unhealthy ,Change preposition
for
also
fattening.For example
,the U.S hasChange the article
an
the
overweighting
Replace the word
overweight
that
makes the Correct pronoun usage
which
goverment
consider a large amount of budget to solve the problem.
One of the Correct your spelling
government
mos
important factors to solve the problem is families which play a crucial role to fix the concern.Correct your spelling
most
For example
,parents can spend more time on
their children by talking to them ,Change preposition
with
also
enrolling at the gym or taking a walk together in their free time or at the weekends .Mothers can be more patient to devote more time to cooking home-made
food to encourage them not to apply junk food.
To conclude,society and families are the essential parts to Correct your spelling
homemade
prevent
the disaster happening these days,which can rescue young Wrong verb form
preventing
generations
lives and Change noun form
generations'
generation's
saving
Wrong verb form
save
budget
of the nations.Correct article usage
the budget
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