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Many parents send their children abroad to study. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages about the phenomenon.

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Nowadays, some
parents
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 have planned to release their
children
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 to attend education overseas.
This
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 essay will tackle both positives and negatives impact.
Firstly
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, many folks believe that studying overseas is one way to find a job quickly after the course. So, prestigious
families
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 are keen to send their
children
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 overseas because
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 will benefit the students and
parents
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.
Also
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, young
people
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 may have the chance to learn about other cultures.
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, these might be too expensive provided that impoverished
families
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 would not afford them, but they will all be worth it. Apart from that, many young and bright
children
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 studying abroad are skilled enough to join some part-time to finance their tuition and allowances.
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, they will work during holidays, at night, and study during the daytime.
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 will be a great help to their
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.
On the other hand
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,
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 in the community assumed that one of the disadvantages would be overpriced fees. Provided that low standard
families
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 may not be able to allow their kids to study overseas,
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, some poor
parents
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 want to send their
children
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 to overseas school for a better future which is why numerous
parents
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 are working so hard to pay for their
children
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's need in school.
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, being lack money, both mother and father will learn how to apply for loans to give them to their child studying abroad. These could lead the
parents
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 to be unsettled and pay more bills.
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, young
people
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 may forget their own cultures and practices away from the country once they have already adapted to the new location.
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, many born Filipino in the US and yet do not know our language and some cultures in their country. In conclusion, studying overseas is a high standard, and
people
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 can easily seek employment. It is beneficial to both
families
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 and society. It is better to take the opportunity to study abroad for
children
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 to gain more knowledge and more ideas.
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