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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue.

#world #measures #government #individuals
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It is clear that
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 the world forces terrible
environment
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environmental
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 issue
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that
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is
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as
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the
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global warming and
therefore
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government
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 and person
both
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should take
their
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action for
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 situation. In
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 essay,
i
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 will highlight reasons and suggest solutions. In terms of the reason, factories usually
use
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 fossil
fuel
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fuels
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such
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 as coal, oil and natural
gas
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 to generate great output, but the obvious downside is producing
carbon
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 dioxide
gas
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.
And
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therefore
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,
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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 effect appeared and
lead
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led
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 to
rise
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a rise
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up
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 global temperature. As for the solution, the
government
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 should encourage factories to
use
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 clean
energy
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such
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 as light
energy
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, wind
energy
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 and tidy
energy
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 to produce.
For individuals
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Individuals
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,
they
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should limit their purchasing
desire
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desires
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 because whichever items, the process of manufacture and transportation always produce
carbon
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 dioxide. With regards
of
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to
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 another reason, uncontrolled logging
make
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carbon
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 emission rise up because trees can absorb
carbon
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 dioxide
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 and turn
into
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it into
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 oxygen
gas
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. Losing the help of photosynthesis will
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 eliminate
economy
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the economy
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. Talking to the solution, the
government
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 should enforce severe punishment which
aim
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aims
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 to
logging
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 and invest in planting trees. On top of that, residents should keep hobbies of being environmental. They can
use
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recycle
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 products
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 as canvas bags and reusable chopsticks. In conclusion, the main
reasons
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reason
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of
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 global warming is excess
carbon
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 emission. It is caused by industries and
also
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 is the result of logging. To ease the problem individuals should learn green travel and keep
low-
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a low-carbon
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carbon
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 style. For
government
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,
they
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should order industries to
use
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 clean
energy
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 and enforce laws to control cutting down trees.
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Task Response
Ensure that the essay stays focused on the given topic and fully addresses all aspects of the question.
Coherence and Cohesion
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Lexical Resource
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Grammatical Range
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burning of fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • trap heat
  • atmosphere
  • deforestation
  • carbon dioxide
  • greenhouse effect
  • industrial activities
  • agricultural practices
  • carbon emissions
  • renewable energy
  • environmental regulations
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • lifestyle changes
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • conserving energy
  • LED bulbs
  • plant-based diet
  • raising awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • mitigate
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